Good effort, few pointers for you dude!
Hey dude, well it's really short, you got the melody pretty damn close though :)
I have a couple of suggestions though, the first one, if you listen to it, you'll notice that there's 2 points where the kicks come just a tad too early, which throws the timing off at those points
on your playlist in FL if you move the sequences that cause that little error, just move them by about 1/4 maybe even 1/2 a beat that should sort those out for you
also have another instrument playing the same melody too, perhaps a synth or other such instrument and maybe a bass too
Just a couple of ideas for you to think about for when you make the full version!
Good luck with that :)
Let me know when you've uploaded that too :)
Hit me back dude!
Peace Out!
Stealth