Well certainly has potential
Hey Tom Fanboy :)
okay on with review, you say your percussional works aren't that good, I would say, based on your efforts with this that they aren't too bad, the melodies on this were pretty decent if I do say so myself. and this has the potential to be a really decent sounding track, you'll want to make the melodies a bit more diverse in future, as it did get a bit repetitive, what with playing that same xylophone(?) for quite a portion of this tune.
Something you seriously need to start looking at doing with your tracks, is EQing them, this track is in dire need of EQ.
If you listen, you'll pick out exactly what I mean. At the point where the kicks and the bass come in, you start to hear a lot of distortion in this piece, and it makes the tune sound pretty awful. You can tell underneath all of that, that this has the foundations of a potentially awesome tune.
One thing that will solve those problems for you, will be the Compressor, if you add that to your mixer in FL you can tweak it so that all the levels in the piece, don't become distorted. You will also be able to add reverb to your percussion too, which will give a nice rich sound to those parts in any piece that you make.
it sounds like you haven't found the mixer track in FL yet, so that's something you will really benefit from using. and your music's real potential will be released. you certainly have the makings to be throwing out some awesome tunage.
So yeah follow those suggestions (I'd be more than happy to throw some more tips your way, just PM me anytime)
Well I'll give you 4/5 for this piece as it has real potential, but is let down heavily, by the need of EQ
Well good luck, don't be afraid to ask more questions, should you need to
Peace Out Man!
Stealth
P.S. if you could spare a minute, a review for my recent piece "Unknown Danger" would be greatly appreciated
SQ in G min - I. Largo v.2.0 
